Viết lại câu tiếng Anh: “Mom braided my hair and I put on my shiny black shoes…”?

Mình muốn hỏi là mình viết câu tiếng Anh: “Mom braided my hair and I put on my shiny black shoes and then we left then we arrived at Ann’s house.” thành “Mom had been braiding my hair while I had been putting on my shiny black shoes before we arrived at John’s house” thì đúng hay sai vậy ạ.